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Scoot's avatar

I hope you'll forgive me using the phrase "Establishing shot" to describe this episode, but it sets the scene perfectly, with juuuuust enough edge to leave me feeling unsettled but I have absolutely no indication of what to expect. Excited for the rest!

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Tamara Shaffer's avatar

This is well-written and intriguing. I especially liked the phrases: "A river-rock fireplace belched a thin trickle of smoke into the clear, sweet air"--belching the smoke is a great image; also "a flurry of fabric." I laughed at "full of meditation and flower arranging and whatever the hell else New Age people did to get their rocks off."

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Leanne Shawler's avatar

Is it bad that I really want to go on a writing retreat now?

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Michael S. Atkinson's avatar

SAME

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Bridget Riley's avatar

Maybe it’s because it was also in the cover photo, but the moth has me a bit unsettled. This is such an atmospheric start!

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J. M. Allen's avatar

I had a similar thought when the moth showed up. It's on the cover, so it must be important!

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Frank's avatar

Ok now, I feel like I could cut the tension in my anticipation with a knife!

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Michael S. Atkinson's avatar

On the one hand I love the idea of a writing retreat in a small cabin like that: on the other... the moth unsettles me. It's not a good sign.

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Connor McGwire's avatar

Making me imagine having a story of mine turned into a bad movie is almost more frightening than Seattle traffic 😭

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Nancy Waddell's avatar

Can't wait for the continuation!

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

Anticipation. Of what? We can't know. Well done!

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Liz Zimmers's avatar

I feel a wonderful shiver of dread, the perfect thing to snuggle in with as the weather turns frosty here and the wind throws rain at the windows. Can’t wait for more!

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