In the race for fiction inspired by the eclipse, S.E. with a great entry.
I loved the economy of story in this, I think just enough backstory was divulged in all aspects.
Which brings me to... "Flash Fiction" -- is this what we would consider flash fiction on Substack? At what point do we consider something a short story vs. flash fiction? Or are they synonymous?
By my count, this is about 1800 words. That, in my book, is a short story. Not that my book is definitive.
I liked this. The description was fantastic. The building of the doom and gloom to when she saw the eclipse was great. How the townsfolk reacted at the end fit well? I got a full sense of her life and the secret buried in her garden growing on her. Makes one wonder what the Eye of God would find looking upon each of us.
Wonderful story. I’m glad in the middle of a busy day but I had to read it because the title captured my imagination. Reminded me of Poe’s Tell-Tale Heart (but not so dark). Totally surprised by the eclipse connection. Bravo!
And that's why I read the paper. The online edition, anyway, and sometimes the actual paper. Also, I loved the line about the floral garden spreading like a skirt, and the cloud not being a cloud, and...wow. Just wow. This was awesome.
You write/paint such cinematic scenes. Me again, thinking I’m in a Twilight Zone episode 😳 Just perfectly imagined (and the goosebumps along with it).
I’m old, so grew up on watching The Twilight Zone —black and white.📺.
Stunning as usual! Took me a second to realize it was an eclipse--inspiration strikes at the most interesting times!
Great story. You really paint a mood. I would have liked to have known more about the girl and why she killed her.
In the race for fiction inspired by the eclipse, S.E. with a great entry.
I loved the economy of story in this, I think just enough backstory was divulged in all aspects.
Which brings me to... "Flash Fiction" -- is this what we would consider flash fiction on Substack? At what point do we consider something a short story vs. flash fiction? Or are they synonymous?
By my count, this is about 1800 words. That, in my book, is a short story. Not that my book is definitive.
I always thought flash fiction was 1k or under. Ish. Between 1k-2k is kind of a gray area, but over 2k is short story territory.
I liked this. The description was fantastic. The building of the doom and gloom to when she saw the eclipse was great. How the townsfolk reacted at the end fit well? I got a full sense of her life and the secret buried in her garden growing on her. Makes one wonder what the Eye of God would find looking upon each of us.
The eclipse took me by surprise! This was such a fantastic, atmospheric story, and the slow trickle of hints and unsettling imagery was hypnotic.
Lovely, dark, and haunting. I likey!
Wow! What a story! I loved this so much. Poor Mrs. Radcliffe (although, payment always comes due, doesn't it?).
Wonderful story. I’m glad in the middle of a busy day but I had to read it because the title captured my imagination. Reminded me of Poe’s Tell-Tale Heart (but not so dark). Totally surprised by the eclipse connection. Bravo!
I want a peacock blue coat!!
And that's why I read the paper. The online edition, anyway, and sometimes the actual paper. Also, I loved the line about the floral garden spreading like a skirt, and the cloud not being a cloud, and...wow. Just wow. This was awesome.
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WOW. I did not expect that ending. Excellent work!
Loved it!