Good evening, friends! I was NOT careful with my pressing of buttons, this evening, and this post wasn't scheduled correctly, instead getting sent out instantly. Oops!
SO! I hope you all enjoy the next part of Tamsin's story a bit earlier than planned.
Can't tell if the scotch broom were acting like claws dragging the car further in or trying to claw it to stay out. That graveyard scene was incredibly spooky. Very well done.
Wow! And then, the apparition spoke, a whisper like the breath in the willows: “Bones. Remain.”
Chilling. (I never had chills like that when King wrote.)
when she saw the forms of two twin yearling deer, shadowy-black and eerily still, standing on either side of the car. Their eyes were glowing white, watching her as she approached. Seeing through her.
Twice Chilling: (You should publish these Ferris Island stories in an anthology. )
Don't seek out the spooky vibes, lest you be spooked by the vibes. Probably a standard joke now, but the 'oh that line is good' bit made me think of Only Murders in the Building. Atmosphere was good, genuine sense of unease. Especially with the lingering follow up question of why exactly the entire town was relocated.
Joking theory that while Ferris Island is known to be vengeful, here it's just annoyed. Maybe like me it believes playing music with your car windows rolled down deserves the death penalty. Also I fear Scoot may have ruined Tamsin for me with that bit of fan art, how am I supposed to take her seriously after that?
Excellent way to have someone using their phone and "new tech" within the story. You brought that up on Notes before I believe. It's not something I've really tried to do but it's pretty clear now that it can be done without being kind of a cop out or too cheesy.
Good evening, friends! I was NOT careful with my pressing of buttons, this evening, and this post wasn't scheduled correctly, instead getting sent out instantly. Oops!
SO! I hope you all enjoy the next part of Tamsin's story a bit earlier than planned.
Technology is humbling, but we press on. 😅
Can't tell if the scotch broom were acting like claws dragging the car further in or trying to claw it to stay out. That graveyard scene was incredibly spooky. Very well done.
Wow! And then, the apparition spoke, a whisper like the breath in the willows: “Bones. Remain.”
Chilling. (I never had chills like that when King wrote.)
when she saw the forms of two twin yearling deer, shadowy-black and eerily still, standing on either side of the car. Their eyes were glowing white, watching her as she approached. Seeing through her.
Twice Chilling: (You should publish these Ferris Island stories in an anthology. )
Don't seek out the spooky vibes, lest you be spooked by the vibes. Probably a standard joke now, but the 'oh that line is good' bit made me think of Only Murders in the Building. Atmosphere was good, genuine sense of unease. Especially with the lingering follow up question of why exactly the entire town was relocated.
Joking theory that while Ferris Island is known to be vengeful, here it's just annoyed. Maybe like me it believes playing music with your car windows rolled down deserves the death penalty. Also I fear Scoot may have ruined Tamsin for me with that bit of fan art, how am I supposed to take her seriously after that?
Excellent way to have someone using their phone and "new tech" within the story. You brought that up on Notes before I believe. It's not something I've really tried to do but it's pretty clear now that it can be done without being kind of a cop out or too cheesy.
"Who knows what spirits still haunt these ancient stones, waiting to be encountered?”
And that's why some questions are best left unasked. Looks like Tamsin didn't expect to be flossing with the ghost deer.
PANICKED FLOSSING
"I RAN OUT LIKE A WRECKING BALL...."
Addended rules for life:
1) no parking in parking garages
2) no unused roads into ancient forests (even with discount tickets!)
Keep it going, S.E.; I'm running ahead of Tamsin, the heck out of there!
Goldgreen TV show. "Brackers" connection (Gold and green)?!!!
Nothing like a ghostly apparition that looks like one's self and then a cliffhanger end that's as good as any heroine tied to the railroad track!
Great story.
The suspense is climbing.....
Will keep my foot inside the covers tonight, spooky goosebump writing at its best. I really enjoy your writing style.