I like the implied (and spooky) causal interactions in this story. Either of the older characters could be jumping around the historical timeline. And you successfully kept within the Fictionistas prompt parameters, despite introducing a necessary PoV shift for keeping the mystery intact and the audience in suspense. Great stuff!
Like Jim was a military pal of Jessica’s husband so she and Moira were military wives together. Jessica goes to visit… dog digs up hand. Opening scene. Cue piano.
This is very well written. Your writing is quiet (I mean that as a compliment), not at all overwrought. Every word feels it has found its place. Thank you for sharing!
Now I'm wondering why Moira targeted Mayor Barton's left hand (ring finger hand?) and how she was able to have enough time during some sort of tussle to completely remove it. Great piece of Flash Fiction. Thoroughly enjoyed it
This makes me want to know more about what's going on with Moira.
Me too!
Man, I have so many questions about this story. Not least of which being how Moira is still alive.
SE Specializes in not answering questions 😂
Everyone needs a hobby. 🤷♀️
I probably shouldn't expect it, considering my own tendency not to answer questions either.
I like the implied (and spooky) causal interactions in this story. Either of the older characters could be jumping around the historical timeline. And you successfully kept within the Fictionistas prompt parameters, despite introducing a necessary PoV shift for keeping the mystery intact and the audience in suspense. Great stuff!
I mean this with all due respect, but I felt like J.B. Fletcher was about to show up the whole time…
Taken as a fabulous compliment!! Jessica is perfectly allowed to show up anytime! 😂
Like Jim was a military pal of Jessica’s husband so she and Moira were military wives together. Jessica goes to visit… dog digs up hand. Opening scene. Cue piano.
They say that there is nothing like a woman scorned
They never imagined that it would be eternal
Yet, the good Moira was wooed, and jilted
and in return she amputated Barton's right hand.
Is it eternal, or is the old lady sinister?
I’ve not read flash fiction before, at least that I know of. I enjoyed the quick literary morsel. I look forward to reading more. Thanks.
This is very well written. Your writing is quiet (I mean that as a compliment), not at all overwrought. Every word feels it has found its place. Thank you for sharing!
Yikes! Moira! I enjoyed this, S.E..
I feel like this comes off the pages of some series with Caroline as our protagonist journalist who stumbles into these amazing stories!
Great last line.
Very good story, I liked how you left the ending up to us the readers to fill in the details.
Nicely done - she sounds like quite a character
Perfect setup and delivery, leaves a delightfull slightly twisted feeling in your gut. I love flash fiction!
Now I'm wondering why Moira targeted Mayor Barton's left hand (ring finger hand?) and how she was able to have enough time during some sort of tussle to completely remove it. Great piece of Flash Fiction. Thoroughly enjoyed it
Chilling. I love the dog digging up the box, it's a great opening, leads to a good mystery.
HANDS IN DIRT omg that was amazing